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Sukomaru
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PostSubject: A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~]   A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~] EmptyFri May 01, 2009 1:35 am

Name: Ikazuki Yari no Jutsu/Thunder Spear Jutsu
Rank: A-rank
Type: Nin
Element: Raiton
Description: The user channels raiton chakra in his palm. He then forms the chakra into a spear like shape. He then launches the spear at his foe. The spear explodes into static on contact,shocking the enemy.

Name: Raikou Kuiki no Jutsu/Lightning Sphere Juts
Rank: B-rank
Type: Nin
Element: Raiton
Description:The user gathers raiton chakra in both his palms,the amount of chakra has to be equal or it won't work. He then forms it into a sphere with static flying in different directions. He then launches it at the enemy,and it explodes into electricity on contact.

Name: Boruto Hi Shotto/Volt Flame Shot
Rank: A-rank
Type: Nin
Element: Raiton and Katon
Description: The user gathers katon chakra in one hand and raiton in the other. After gathering the chakra he puts his hands together and fires the chakra. The two chakras deal great damage together.


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PostSubject: Re: A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~]   A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~] EmptyFri May 01, 2009 2:27 am

They all look good to me, but just to avoid confusion about the last technique, could you change the last sentence to "Together, the two attacks can cause extreme damage to a target." Just because people might get the wrong idea about that technique being a fusion of the two natures to form a new, 'secondary' nature (like Ice or Wood, for example).

Thanks,

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PostSubject: Re: A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~]   A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~] EmptyFri May 01, 2009 2:39 am

Better?
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PostSubject: Re: A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~]   A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~] EmptyFri May 01, 2009 3:15 am

Erm, not really. It was more losing the whole "combine" bit that I was after. How about:

Together, the two powerful attacks can cause extreme damage to a target.

Try that?
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PostSubject: Re: A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~]   A Few New Jutsu [~Approved; ~Fox~] EmptyFri May 01, 2009 3:48 am

There,thank you for being so patient
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~Approved.
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